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Then water, you and I,
Scorpio and Cancer, respectively,

yours the calm fathomed passion of lake
mine a spring fed, fast-tumbling brook

You taught me to swim in your deep
with caressing breast and leg stroke

I flashed my silver moon flair, leapt,
like a fish, into dizzying ozone air

matched my fall-free
drowning-dive to your quiver.

Oh the silky innuendo,
shimmered laughter and sparkling jive -

though you wanted more of wet and more wet,
I, the tiptoe through shallow

fearful I could get lured, hooked
by such a catch-and-release kind of man.
A poem teased from answers given to the instruction name your favorite body of water.

I welcome feedback (in comments) on what does or does not work for the reader.
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Given 2014-02-02
Water Signs by belcanto2 ( Featured by neurotype )
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Dreamer-of-Magic Feb 2, 2014   General Artist
This is very nice :) Very carefree. I need summer. >.<
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:iconbelcanto2:
Thanks for the read and 'very nice'. Wink/Razz  Me too on summer - though I'd settle for spring! Pouring down buckets today. We're lucky though. Other parts not too far away are getting more snow on top of snow.
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Dreamer-of-Magic Feb 3, 2014   General Artist
:noes: I want some rain. Rain would be really nice #hardly ever get any

And you're welcome! :)
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:iconbelcanto2:
 Me neith..th..th.. :D (Big Grin) :D (Big Grin) :D (Big Grin) :D (Big Grin) 
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Postaff Feb 2, 2014  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Wow! That's all I can say about this piece! I enjoyed reading this! You are a very talented person, congrats on the DD :D
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:iconbelcanto2:
Wow is quite enough! :D (Big Grin)  I'm tickled over the DD, so thanks.  It's great fun to be on the receiving end of so much attention and I can recommend acquiring one! Wink/Razz 
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Postaff Feb 4, 2014  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Haha no problem. And you deserve this attention, you did a great job :)
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Penguin598 Feb 2, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I normally am not one for poetry, for it confuses me as I am not a deep thinker. 
But my zodiac sign (Scorpio) caught my eye and I must say, I really enjoyed reading this poem! Well done! You a have a very impressive skill! 
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:iconbelcanto2:
Scorpio! Heart So pleasing to hear a non-poetry reader enjoyed this. Thank you for your kind words. 
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Penguin598 Feb 3, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You are most welcome! You certainly deserve them! 
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