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Then water, you and I,
Scorpio and Cancer, respectively,

yours the calm fathomed passion of lake
mine a spring fed, fast-tumbling brook

You taught me to swim in your deep
with caressing breast and leg stroke

I flashed my silver moon flair, leapt,
like a fish, into dizzying ozone air

matched my fall-free
drowning-dive to your quiver.

Oh the silky innuendo,
shimmered laughter and sparkling jive -

though you wanted more of wet and more wet,
I, the tiptoe through shallow

fearful I could get lured, hooked
by such a catch-and-release kind of man.
A poem teased from answers given to the instruction name your favorite body of water.

I welcome feedback (in comments) on what does or does not work for the reader.
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Daily Deviation

Given 2014-02-02
Water Signs by belcanto2 ( Featured by neurotype )
:icondreamer-of-magic:
Dreamer-of-Magic Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014   General Artist
This is very nice :) Very carefree. I need summer. >.<
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:iconbelcanto2:
belcanto2 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014
Thanks for the read and 'very nice'. Wink/Razz  Me too on summer - though I'd settle for spring! Pouring down buckets today. We're lucky though. Other parts not too far away are getting more snow on top of snow.
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Dreamer-of-Magic Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014   General Artist
:noes: I want some rain. Rain would be really nice #hardly ever get any

And you're welcome! :)
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belcanto2 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014
 Me neith..th..th.. :D (Big Grin) :D (Big Grin) :D (Big Grin) :D (Big Grin) 
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Postaff Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Wow! That's all I can say about this piece! I enjoyed reading this! You are a very talented person, congrats on the DD :D
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:iconbelcanto2:
belcanto2 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014
Wow is quite enough! :D (Big Grin)  I'm tickled over the DD, so thanks.  It's great fun to be on the receiving end of so much attention and I can recommend acquiring one! Wink/Razz 
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Postaff Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2014  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Haha no problem. And you deserve this attention, you did a great job :)
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Penguin598 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I normally am not one for poetry, for it confuses me as I am not a deep thinker. 
But my zodiac sign (Scorpio) caught my eye and I must say, I really enjoyed reading this poem! Well done! You a have a very impressive skill! 
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:iconbelcanto2:
belcanto2 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
Scorpio! Heart So pleasing to hear a non-poetry reader enjoyed this. Thank you for your kind words. 
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:iconpenguin598:
Penguin598 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You are most welcome! You certainly deserve them! 
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:iconbelcanto2:
belcanto2 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014
Hug 
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:iconmiddlechild3:
middlechild3 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love this~ And it's quite true
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belcanto2 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
Cute avatar! :D (Big Grin)  Happy you love this. Thanks for read and comment.
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middlechild3 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I am glad you liked it =) .I made it my self . It's from a show called teen titans there's hardly any fan art for this character. I will be watching you for your wonderful poems and stories . I am always up for a readings.
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Fallenflame13 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
I love this~ And it's quite true for the water signs. Congrats on the DD
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:iconbelcanto2:
belcanto2 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
Fallen, yeah, we water signs are an emotional lot! Thanks for the congrats. I'm pleased with the DD but  as a newbie here can't quite figure out how they happen or where they're posted so that others can read them. Smiley Confused 
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Fallenflame13 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014
I've been a member for a few now and still don't know so don't worry about it hahaha XD
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Karinta Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Student General Artist
Mmmmmmm I love the water metaphors and the interlinear (?) rhyming.
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:iconbelcanto2:
belcanto2 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
 There you are again, Karinta!  I use metaphor a lot and it does get tricky, so I'm pleased you like it here. Thanks for telling me what pleases you about this piece. :) (Smile) 
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Karinta Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014  Student General Artist
That's true! You're very welcome, dearest.
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is gorgeous! Congratulations on the DD! You deserve it. :heart:
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belcanto2 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
You have no idea how puffed up my head is getting over this DD. Lovely to read gorgeous and congratulations. Thank you.  Heart 
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It's a very nice feeling, isn't it? You're welcome. :heart:
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Nostalgiakitten Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
I like this one... do you have Air Signs?
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:iconbelcanto2:
belcanto2 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
Do you mean in a poem, or in planets on my personal chart?  No (not at this moment, anyway) on a poem about air signs, yes on my personal chart. Two.  Thank you for liking this one kitten!   Wink/Razz 
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Nostalgiakitten Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
I'll have to look then (On you're personal chart)
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:iconbelcanto2:
belcanto2 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
:D (Big Grin) 
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:iconnostalgiakitten:
Nostalgiakitten Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
you are a really good writer
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Swep-Lovitt Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
this is a good one, one of several of yours that would repay the reader with interest if they were to delve into your gallery. 
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belcanto2 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
Swep, your loyal support over years is so special to me. Thank you. Kiki 
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IyraEMM Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
this is beautiful. congrats :heart:
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:iconbelcanto2:
belcanto2 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
This is an overwhelming surprise! Thank you very much
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IyraEMM Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
you're welcome :)
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beeinthebottle Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014   Writer
Congratulations on the DD! :heart:
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:iconbelcanto2:
belcanto2 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
My dear new writing friend, thank you so much.  I'm gob-stopped!  No ribs in this one, you'll notice. :D (Big Grin) 
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TruthisTruth Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Congratulations on the Daily Deviation! :clap:
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:iconbelcanto2:
belcanto2 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
Pleased as all get out with your read and comment as well as the DD. Thank you!
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TruthisTruth Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome!
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strawbbiemorgan Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
you're a real poet, dear
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:iconbelcanto2:
belcanto2 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
That's quite a compliment. Thank you.:) (Smile) 
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Gae-ta Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
A Scorpio and a cancer? Interesting mix. One is passionate, sly and vengeful and the other is sensitive, kind and caring... if i remember it right. I really like how figurative this poem is and yet so open to interpretation, in my mind it's about two girls that are BFFS or perhaps sisters which affect each other's personalities. ..and mayhaps dating and sex, but that might just be me ._.'

Also i really love the fine mix of elegant words like "fathomed, flair and passion" followed by the plain and colloquial "catch-and-release kind of guy" -it gives the poem so much more personality. This person can be poetic and whimsical and yet be, the following second, down to earth, making a slightly snarky joke. 
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belcanto2 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
Gae-ta, pleased with your detailed feed-back on what you like about this piece, and enjoying your speculations. Yep, could be any two people, couldn't it?  Sort of like the message in the music video I put on my journal page, 'say something, I'm giving up on you'.  I think both signs have their not-so-nice sides though, according to astrology! Hug 
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:iconlintu47:
lintu47 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
Have a nice day! :heart:
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belcanto2 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
lintu, thank you so much. :) (Smile) 
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure :happybounce:
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AkilaKM Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Student General Artist
This poem is beautiful, and I love the final lines :heart:
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:iconbelcanto2:
belcanto2 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
You do? The part I've struggled with most and others have questioned. Chuffed to hear this! :D (Big Grin) 
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savedbythespell Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Student Writer
Wow, this is so wonderful. I am a Cancer and Cancer and Scorpio are my favorite couple in the astrological wheel. It's just so spiritual and magnetic. My birth chart is 90% water as well.
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belcanto2 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
Oh, thank you for spiritual and magnetic my 90% water friend!Heart 
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tigabelle Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
CONGRATS ON THE DAILY DEVIATION!!! :huggle::heart:
wonderful interpretation of the prompt! 
a little note from my opinion: the last word, "guy", seems a little informal compared to the rest of the poem.

I'm a scorpio ^u^ Zodimotes - Scorpio 
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